April
In the Hira Mountains, beech trees will soon come into leaf, high up above our steps.
At the mountain foot, a lot of edible wild plants - white, yellow, green, brown…
trail
on the unmelted snow -
morning sunrays
In the Hira Mountains, beech trees will soon come into leaf, high up above our steps.
At the mountain foot, a lot of edible wild plants - white, yellow, green, brown…
trail
on the unmelted snow -
morning sunrays
April 10, 2008 at 1:22 pm
とってもすがすがしいイメージです。
高校生の頃，毎月のように通っていた比良・北山を懐かしくおもいだしました。
April 10, 2008 at 6:46 pm
朝のさわやかな空気の中、春を感じている俳句momentですね。
April 24, 2008 at 11:53 am
Both are nice, but possibly the haiku and the photo mirror each other too exactly? Although I usually fail to get the balance right myself, I feel that just as image juxtaposition 取り合わせ in haiku is best if there’s a gap (on occasion, even a gulf) between the two halves, in haiga and haipho too, ideally one doesn’t want the poem and the illustration to repeat each other.
April 24, 2008 at 3:37 pm
Interesting combination: prose;photo;haiku.
Tito seems to emphasize creating a “gap” between the photo and the haiku. Because there is a prose element, perhaps rearranging the order of these three elements might help achieve some level of a “gap”? For example; Picture first; followed by the prose underneath, and then the haiku? A kind of circular effect, or maybe even a slow revelation as to what the picture could be about.
I like the sense of inevitability expressed in the first line of the prose (are the beech trees small enough to step on?). I also like the underlying tensions expressed in the haiku (trail, unmelted snow, and sunrays). Perhaps the images (the moment) might be presented more effectively in a one liner?
April 25, 2008 at 1:55 pm
According to advices of Tito and Gerald, I edited this post. It has become nice! Thank you!