three for May
Needle-nosed finch
tweezing among
the apple blossoms.
Stubborn tree–
finally a few leaf-shreds
spider out from their buds.
Crossing the street
with her boyfriend, half-dancing
to the ice cream truck.
Needle-nosed finch
tweezing among
the apple blossoms.
Stubborn tree–
finally a few leaf-shreds
spider out from their buds.
Crossing the street
with her boyfriend, half-dancing
to the ice cream truck.
May 22, 2009 at 2:03 pm
‘tweezing’ is wonderful.
Have we just had a new word coined on our website?
May 22, 2009 at 2:07 pm
apparently not, according to the googlebrain, but fresh as this morning’s mackerel
May 23, 2009 at 12:59 pm
i like the ice cream truck reference. A great spring kigo, you’ve reminded me to attempt to apply it. I’ve been noticing its melody mixed with the
natural spring sounds.
I like the young boy and girlfriend reference, too. I noticed a few similar scenes lately while driving through the ‘hood. It was the boys who looked smitten, and the girls, blossom cool.
May 23, 2009 at 3:22 pm
I too think the use of tweezing is wondeful and interesting on several levels for me. Tweezing seems to either add to the image of the finch, or suggest the possibilty of a human too “tweezing” among the apple blossoms. Finally, the use of tweezing also seems to pull together a light music within the poem, and infuse it with humor.
I enjoy rereading this poem. so much from so little…
May 25, 2009 at 4:57 am
Gosh, thank you all! E.
June 2, 2009 at 5:28 am
To clarify-ice cream is a traditional summer reference in Japan. The mobile ice cream salesman’s appearance here occurs in mid-spring and corraborates that winter is past. My apologies for any confusion. I was a little excited after the long winter of Minnesota.