still waiting for spring

eyes

open

another hangover

the frost on the window

the sound of the river

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6 Responses to “still waiting for spring”

  1. Downloaded an RSS reader, so that if at my computer when a new posting is published, it pings (rather loudly!). Unsure whether it’s one or two poems: if the former, the process of gradual awakening extends and I like it. Please upload an avatar for your comments.

  2. hmiyazaki Says:

    Hello, David:
    I suppose you still run about in Kitayama mountains like a Tengu. In stead of running, I walk around through paths in the paddy field like a tortoise, which is surely effective to clear my hangover. However, sometimes I’m swept off my feet in the spring mud (shun-dei, 春泥) and in trouble to get away unlike the animal. Today, too! Cold water!

  3. david mccullough Says:

    I want to make it clear that this is one poem, with a pause in the middle, but this doesnt seem to be very clear.
    Any advice?

  4. How about a single ellipsis (3 dots) at the end of the 2nd line and scrap the dotted line?

  5. aquahaiqua Says:

    Dotty.

  6. a vote for stephen´s suggestion

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