deep in the ricefield
the small boys
surround their frogs
the facade on the love hotel
resembles a circus tent
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‘their’ frogs is sweet.
The first one vividly makes me recall the summer days when I was a young boy. The last line is brimming with ‘haimi’ or haiku taste, I think.
I can just see the scene. Gerald has not only captured a
moment in the boy’s summer holidays but also a time
in their lives. One wonders what is going to happen next.
Gerald, these are really fine!
I’ll venture one suggestion: “Looks like a circus tent” for “Resembles a circus tent.”
a beautifully described scene! – deep in the rice field, the boys, their frogs – an isolated and intimate world with you as documentarist, a bit far , yet touching – thanks :)
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