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3 Responses to “and yet”
the power of a star on unwashed glasses. brilliant. nice cohesion among the words in each line of this poem. and an equally nice connection between a celestial body, and the human activity/material, as represented in the unwashed glasses.
at first, the second line presented a conflict. my mind automatically wanted those unwashed glasses to be in a kitchen. i guess “the room full of” phrase could suggest a party/event, or…?
perhaps beginning the second line with the article “a” instead of “the” might help capture a smoother, lighter atmosphere i think implied in this poem.