6 responses to “falling

  1. This is very original, David. The photo is beautiful and sets the poem off to good effect. Nice to return to winter after Hisashi’s presumptive blast of spring and my ambivalent Mexican mist. Don’t colours look wonderful against the dark inside our Icebox?

  2. Even to my ageing ear, the thump of snow fall sounds well, touched by the sun’s finger. Silence of the forest, well expressed. The part of snow touched by the tree-filtered sun must be very brightly shining. Is this a new form of five line haiku?

  3. What an atmospheric photo!

    Would the poem (haiku?) not be better with just the first three lines? ‘sun fingers’ is wonderfully poetic and goes nicely with the thump… The last two lines seem redundant and detract from the concision….

  4. “Fingers” is a great verb! Both vivid and beautiful on its own, and perfectly sets up the “thump” of sun-warmed snow slipping off the branches. A treat!