Feeling

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With one accord

The willows green –

… … Disaster year

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2 Responses to “Feeling”

  1. the green willows image is plaintive & the spare expression moving. I just wonder if “with one accord” seems a bit contrived, maybe trying too hard to say something …

  2. It’s always great to have critical comments. We learn from them. Thanks, Fred. The first line was meant to convey, ‘all at once’, while implying the hope for a change for the better (spring after winter, healing after disaster). Yet, you’re right. I was still somewhat at a loss for words, and thus my poem feels a little contrived. You spotted a statement; and statements don’t really work in haiku.

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