Thanks for your comment, Gerald. To me, Orion without ‘the hunter’ is not anthropomorphic enough for the image in this haiku, and doesn’t sing. In Britain, at least, we often attach the attribute, conveying more vividly his giant, striding, star-belted presence in the sky. The eclipsed moon was poised a little way above the constellation, of course, but hardly at a safe distance.
Congratulations! But now I think they should bring Dottie inside. Looks cold out….
I found this haiku both humorous and startling. I agree that ‘the hunter’ is useful here; the rhythm rolls well and adds to the personification. ‘A rotten orange moon’ took me by surprise – why rotten? The image is too beautiful to look anything rotten.