Beautiful, Gerald. So good to have something of yours again. Fine work! The kinesthesia in the haiku is reminiscent (but only slightly) of Basho’s ‘white’ calls of the flying ducks.
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Great work, Gerald. Very artistic! I was worried at first about ‘seeing the call’ but the mix of senses works well with the physical penetration into the depths of the bamboo (is ‘wild’ necessary?). The haiga/haiku combination is so effective that if I had the least bit of talent for painting, I’d be doing that too….
I have to agree with Dougill John about “seeing”. Mixing the senses
may be a standard haiku technique, true, but here I’d rather get “deeper”
into the point of the poem, the call.
If I am allowed, I’d like to suggest an alternate ending, one that remains still within the 7-5-7 form:
Deep into the wild bamboo
wanting to better hear the
Nevertheless, the haiku and the ink drawing work marvelously well together. Truly a fine piece of haiga.