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Posted in Haipho, Winter, Workshopping with tags , on February 27, 2020 by Tito


Hirosawa Pond, Kyoto, 26.2.20

– click on the photo to enlarge –

Spring or not?

Posted in Haiqua, Workshopping with tags on March 11, 2017 by Tito

Here’s a haiqua penned today in Kitasaga. As it stands, does it evoke early spring… and, if so, why? Or should I tweak it/chuck it?

Littered mud
from big tyres
along the track –
a kite hunts low

a cirku for comments

Posted in Cirku, Summer, Workshopping on August 21, 2014 by Tito

golden stone cirku trim


(Kitasaga, Kyoto, 21.8.14)


Click on the photo to enlarge and read the cirku.

Questions: (1) Would the haiku have been better without the photo or (2) as a one- or two-liner rather than as a cirku?

As comments, your opinions, please.

fire & water

Posted in Autumn, Haipho, Workshopping on November 30, 2013 by Tito



Now that the mountain
Has burst into flame
Begging the river
Not to put it out.

(Arashiyama, 28.11.13)

My friend’s haiku

Posted in Haiku, Japanese Modern, Workshopping on September 27, 2012 by Nori

I went to my former apartment to have a talk with some residents there. It felt like old alumni meeting up.

During our four hours of chat, one person asked me to translate her haiku. They are important to her because she made these when she was recovering from illness. She wanted to see how they sounded in English. So I tried some translations, but I’d appreciate others’ feedback.

Down to the globe
The blazing moon shoots
Arrows of light

Lights of the wing
Twinkles like a stitch
Dark evening sky

Melting Snow

Posted in Haiqua, Winter, Workshopping on February 11, 2011 by Tito


A veil is shed

From the distant Paps of Ohara:

The jay knocks down

More melting snow.

(Mount Ogura, Kyoto, 11.2.11)


Posted in Spring, Uncategorized, Workshopping on March 31, 2010 by david mccullough

snow whips

full-blown cherrytrees

he finds a hole

in his heart